Envision Carlsbad; A changing time
Green Trails, soft sand: No real limitations
Trail blazers: Freedom in imaginations
Secret beaches, Hazy blue so sublime
Moonlight lit adventures under the stars
Of inward happiness we are selfish men
Save us from the need of a pictured lens
help us recreate, what now seems so far
A beauty once untouched, secluded sight
A voice we never thought we would ever need
Pure as the white sand, turned black by our greed
Living care-free ,we forgot our impact
Silent beaches, safety in the star light
Sun kissed and dazed, a land we left ransacked
In my poem I based it off Woodsworth London 1802. In it he uses the style of Petrarchan sonnets or ‘Italian sonnet’ in which it is written in iambic pentamenter, which has 10 syllabuls in each line and follows generally 5 pairs of stressed and unstressed syllabuls. The overall structure is Petrarchan sonnet is divided into two parts, an octave (the first eight lines of the poem) and a sestet (the final six lines). The Petrarchan sonnet can take a number of variable rhyme schemes; in this case, the octave (which typically proposes a question or an idea), follows a rhyme scheme of ABBAABBA, and the sestet (which typically answers the question or comments upon the idea) follows a rhyme scheme of BCCDBD (sparknotes). Woodsworth is calling for Milton in almost an outburst in his frustration with the current times of England. He calls out the ‘sword’, the ‘alter’, and the ‘pen’ all symblozing the church, the military, and the English writers of the time for loosing their morals. Woodsworth wants Milton to come back and restore all these great tragedies he sees and return it to a time of the great old England.
Similarly I attempted to follow this pattern by following the structuring and similar ideas with my hometown of Carlsbad. I begin with “Envision Carlsbad” a program where they are focusing on saving and preserving the land of Carlsbad so that more and more people can enjoy the nature and beauty of a beach town with lots of natural areas to explore. A lot of the terms I chose to use are also inunendos in that 10 years ago Carlsbad and a lot of the parks didn’t need to have so much drastic changes for preservation and the city vibes were very laid back and had a lot of emphasis on exploring the nature ( not exactly in the right state of mind). The problem was these people would often drink and smoke and end up trashing up all these great things so that it is no longer the same. There is this beautiful area back home called the mushrooms caves where it is said that a long time ago people would do shrooms and that’s why all the walls are painted so intricately but as more and more people go to visit this place (on a nature reservation) illegally, they leave trash and the sands are filled with the black broken shards of glass. My version of Woodsworth is talking about how im reminiscent of a time before where people would ‘blaze’ and explore the beauties of my hometown before all these rules were implemented by ‘Envision Carlsbad’ but how contradictory that is because my generation was living so care free we quickly and in some places permantely altered the beauty of the beach, trails, and the general feelings. But also, as my hometown is being cleaned up there is no ‘silent beaches’ like there used to be. More and more people are coming and what I once experienced as a child is most likely something I will never experience again. It was a time that was different and because of that it is so important that we do start chaging even if it means altering for the future. All this freedom we experienced for so long is now being traded for preservation and it reminds me of woodsworth poem in that England was experiencing it seems more freedom there was also a loss of moral obligations, and so like Woodsworth is saying he wants to go back to the old times, I personally want everyone to start embracing the new times because the old ways just weren’t working. So in this way I attempted to get the inverse opinion of Woodsworth reflected in my poem. I also used similar words and phrases from woods worth to really emphasize the point of the need for change and the effects of the greed of people. The first set of the poem talks more about the freedom and indulgences we used to feel and the second set talks of the consequences and how we do desperately need change.
woods worth poem:
Milton! thou shouldst be living at this hour:
England hath need of thee: she is a fen
Of stagnant waters: altar, sword, and pen,
Fireside, the heroic wealth of hall and bower,
Have forfeited their ancient English dower
Of inward happiness. We are selfish men;
Oh! raise us up, return to us again;
And give us manners, virtue, freedom, power.
Thy soul was like a Star, and dwelt apart:
Thou hadst a voice whose sound was like the sea:
Pure as the naked heavens, majestic, free,
So didst thou travel on life’s common way,
In cheerful godliness; and yet thy heart
The lowliest duties on herself did lay.
mushroom caves: you can see the original art and now tampered with graffiti